The girl waited for the man to finish his coffee. She sat on a park bench and thought about her upcoming exam.
Here's a breakdown of why this works:
* "Girl" and "man" are more concrete than "person," especially since the sentence implies a specific person.
* "Coffee" is more concrete than "thing," as it specifies the object the person is working on.
* "Park bench" is more concrete than "a," as it specifies the type of seat.
* "Exam" is more concrete than "stuff," as it specifies a specific topic the girl is thinking about.
This version emphasizes tangible objects and actions, making the sentence more vivid and easier to visualize.